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The Wail And Cry

Angels hear the wail and cry
Of lonely spirits when they die.
One more heartache, too much pain;
One last struggle to rise again.

Burdened down by life’s heavy sword;
crushed to death, they cry to the Lord
thru stinging sorrow, from weary souls.
They conjur visions of dead sea scrolls

Lost and buried beneath the sands,
In unknown places and foreign lands.
Such treasures hidden, but not forever,
Also wait for death’s last measure,
. . . of everlasting peace.






Answer :
read over and over to find words, that you don't need in their, like this, lost, buried beneath sands, unknown places, foreign lands, treasures not forever hidden, also deaths measures, peace lasting ever

Bubba Boo you get the 10 points because you actually said something worth considering that might be helpful to me in this piece.
Thanks!






Answer :
Wow, I like it alot.
You are talented.
Very nice work:)






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i like it....u've got skills...ur expressin was incredible






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i like it a little sad but, good!!!